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01 August 2008 @ 06:52 am
Solitude.  
This is for my FP story, Solitude.

I have recently decided that I would like to rewrite this story.

Why would I want to rewrite it?

I think it is fairly obvious why. ;)

Basically, I started this story almost three years ago. It was written on a whim as an experiment. I’ve always been heavy in descriptions, but weak in dialogue. I wanted to do something different, and I wanted a bit of a mystery. Thus, Solitude was born. And while the first few chapters add to the mystery, it does not help when trying to develop characters.

When you first meet someone, all you see is what they show you. I wanted to introduce the readers to both Jack and Allie as if you were meeting them for the first time. I wanted the readers to find out what they were like the same time the characters did. I think I accomplished this, but I was trying so hard to make both Allie and Jack a mystery when the whole mystery just lies with Allie. If I continued the way I’m going, Jack will be revealed and his POV will be more descriptive, but Allie’s will remain vague, and I just feel as if the story would be unbalanced and awkward. It already kind of is.

What would the rewrite entail?

I’m really, really nervous about the rewrite because I have poured a lot more of myself into it. It is much more detailed, but hopefully will still retain the mystery this story holds.

This, however, is the one downfall of the rewrite: it might be written entirely from Jack’s point of view. This terrifies me since I am not a boy. I am afraid that Jack comes off sounding girly. I absolutely adore Allie and her thoughts. I would hate to lose them, but the mystery is all about Allie, and in order to keep the mystery intact and the story flowing, this might be the way to go.

I’m not sure if this idea will be well received since I think Allie generally has more fans than Jack. But I can say this: Jack is not as shallow as he seems. :)

But I’m still working on it. I’m trying my best to find a way to incorporate Allie’s POV as well, but I just feel it is off in comparison to Jack’s.

If I haven’t scared you off…

I’d really love a second opinion on this. If anyone would be willing to read the chapters that I have currently have, that would be great. They are rough drafts, though, and have yet to be checked over for grammar and typos, so there are bound to be errors.

Or if you think this idea is stupid and that I should suck it up and stick with this version, just let me know. The rewrite may just become a side project for me and I’ll continue this one as is.

If I were to do this, I probably would create a different story, as it will most likely have another name. I don’t know if I’d post all chapters at once, just because there will be new information in them, but I’d wait until I had at least seven, so I could post them as quickly as possible for you guys to get to eight.
 
 
 
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itstruelovee: himym; barneyitstruelovee on August 5th, 2008 05:57 am (UTC)
Thank you so much for offering. I plan on posting what I have of it in the next day or so. :)